2 thoughts on “A Variation on Zen

  1. Very, very nice! Short and sweet and 5-7-5 be dam*ed! *g*

    A variant below also works, but truthfully I like yours better. Nine syllables versus 13 in the variant. Yours is punchier! 🙂

    cherry blossoms
    one petal, then another…then
    spring!

    (One slight typo in “floating” — no biggie)

    Good work!

    Ron

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